dhrakis ([info]dhrakis) wrote,
2005-08-06 04:47:00
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  • Mood: determined
  • Music: Muse: Bliss

Enigma *(Oh wont you be my muse)*

Passions lost,
Trusts are gone,
Broken far to long,
Shattered in a land forclosed

I'm fading,
It wants me,
Lost and found place,
Truth pardons all of me.

Secluded misery,
I'm sick dieing,
Please take me away,
Systems futile justify for me.

Okay seperate,
Everything you are,
Chance to be heard,
Got to be the best.

No time,
Forgiven to me,
Leads only ways out,
Fades away all the same.
~J.J.S.

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[info]pingpaw

August 8 2005, 07:08:56 UTC 6 years ago

apart from the few spelling errors, this piece is cut very cleanly. it has well defined lines, and that is a hard thing to do. but it feels very empty to me as a reader. maybe that has to do with your work choice in expressing yourself, or maybe you meant for it to feel that way. if the latter is the case, then i must say well played.

[info]dhrakis

August 8 2005, 07:11:45 UTC 6 years ago

yea there wasn't meant to be any real depth behind any of it.
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